OK, you need to learn the difference between past and passed.

Oh my goodnes! What a wonderful story! I love it! The only suggestion that i have is when some one breaks off their sentance or is interupted use this:

"Theron--"
"No don't say anything!"

or:

"I wish i knew the truth . . ."

this make make it easier to understand. But other wise and excellant book. Ver creative and active. can't wait to read teh next.

uuh no offense
but this seems to be a rip off
of baulder's gate it's probably a good story
so i'll keep reading

AH! This seems to end abruptly! Hm, I see you have another installment, so I'll go look at that one. This is a wonderful story. Characters are well crafted and there is a nice movement to where this is going. I can't wait to read more!

-SA->

You left a very BIG cliffhanger over there dearie...

but then that makes your story irresistable..

-melai

nice story.. totally impressed!

Ah, yes, and I =tayed up 12 hours to read this!

You had me crying at the end.

I cannot believe no one else has reviewed this story! Marvelous characters, tremendous battles, incredible conflicts, and a very interesting plotline. You may be playing the pathos a bit heavy, and the Clintonesqe chastity rings wrond. Many unfaithful wives, don't husbands cheat too? Really looking forwards to the next Arywan Series! Thanks for sharing!