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| margiegirl21 2005-04-22 ch 5,  | abuseAs usual this is great I love the suspense in this story. Cant wait till you update |
| margiegirl21 2005-01-12 ch 1, | abuseNOT BAD PRETTY GOOD /CALL ME |
| KidAFRO 2004-11-25 ch 3, anon. | abuseok ok ok, i liked the story~ it's well written and everything, but i think it might need just a little bit more imagery than what you originally write. i think you should describe more sights and sounds, places, things of that nature. but this is still a good story. well done! |
| Nikko 2004-09-22 ch 1, anon. | abuseNot a bad story overall, I like the emotional display that you put in chapter two. I think you could really go somewhere with this story. Update as soon as you can. Nice story. |