Strangely fascinating. Very nice, by the way.

Hey Shmori!! I like this alot-- we just did an essay on description in AP LAng, so i kinda paid attention to your discriptions in this lol and I thought they were pretty good, maybe you could branch out a bit on them though. THe personifications of the shadows are really cool!! Love ya!

Y'know, I only found two typos in this whole thing? And they were both in the same paragraph... Good job! ^^ It's an interesting story, and yes, I think the ending could use some work. But I don't think you should take it any farther. Keep it short and simple. But this still doesn't excuse you for not posting the next shadowing chapter...

...Wow... This story is a great one for people who like spies, assassins, and most of all, stealth. Awesome imagery! Can't wait if you write more!