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| Ballerina with a Gun 2005-06-19 ch 1,  | abuseSo funny!! Awesome...I liked it. Good job!! |
| Artemis Nomad 2005-02-02 ch 1, | abuseQuite comical indeed! I really enjoyed the rhyming, something not seen in todays freestyle poetry, and it definatly had a beat to it, props for that! The thought behind it too was very good, it really made me think about where does love cross the line? Good job! |
| Emmytastic gal 2005-01-25 ch 1, | abuseLOVE IT! GREAT JOB. i dont think you went over the top, it was very humorous and brings a smile to the readers lips. And I actually have seen situation when a person is so infatuated and smitten they forget everything around them except for that person... its quite pathetic. nonetheless I love this composition, the work of a very talented writer. check out some of my poems when you get a sec, thnx! write on...-Em |
| R.Valaina 2004-11-20 ch 1, | abuseI thought it was really good!I really enjoyed reading it. Pleae r/r my story. KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK! |
| Battle Raven 2004-11-03 ch 1, | abuseI have no idea WHY I never read this before, because it's hilarious...Seriously. The rhyme scheme is fantastic - you don't find many poems whose rhymes actually make sense and fit in with the plot...or whatever plot a poem may have...theme! There you go! The THEME of a poem!. Great job! Tis going on my favorites list! |
| Shinji Boi69 2004-10-17 ch 1, | abuseKudos to you for being so versitile. YOu write about so many different things. This is cool. I really want to read your westerns though. They should prove interesting. Keep up the great work. bye for now. ~shinjiboi |
| ishina elizabeth 2004-09-16 ch 1, | abuselol! i love it. ^_^ The satyrical sound comes through just right -- not too strong, but definitely there. Your choice of obvious rhyming aids that very nicely. One line has me a bit confused. "He avoided her bed, this lady’s stay chaste!" doesn't sound quite right. Other than that, the whole thing flows quite well. The fourth and fifth stanzas had me in giggles. Lovely done. ^_^ |
| Perilous Escapist 2004-09-15 ch 1, | abuseHaha, this was very amusing, and you rhymed very well. The flow was a little off at times, but I think that you did an awesome job! Keep writing! |