Well, I finally read it. It only took me forever and a day. It's good, but, very typical and it's kinda like reading one big cliche (I apologize in advance for the harsh review; hunger does that to ya XD) Don't even get me started on the punctuation errors. You had alot of run-on sentences because you put commas between words that didn't need to be separated by commas and then the commas weren't where they were supposed to be. And you randomly capitalized the first letter of your verbs and nouns when someone was speaking, like "'... He requested that you serve as his squire in battle,' The page stammered." Why is "the" capitalized? You also did that in the middle of sentences with words like "horn." Maybe there was a reason, but I think you should have made that clear by using some sort of uniform for it. And I think you may have been getting "sir" and "sire" confused. Was Godfrey a king? If he wasn't a king, then Jacob shouldn't have been referring to him as "sire." Or maybe he was a king, but you should have made that clear too. And the feelings that Jacob felt for Sarah- that "relationship" should have been drawn out more (I guess in light of the assignment, you couldn't really draw that out, ne?) There was one thing that I did like though, and that was the incorporation of poetry into the story. Of course, as with every good thing I'm going to say about this, I have a bad thing to accompany it. Why did you have little quotations in front of every line? That's only necessary for the first poem; that was done okay. But the second one didn't need to have quotes before every line.
Anyway, I'm done now. You wanted my review, and here it is. Sorry to be so critical ... like I said, hunger will do that to ya. ^^;