Okay, this chapter reminded me of two things. The first was the Aztecs, with the human sacrifice to keep warped deities appeased. The other thing was Harpies. I imagined the soul eater to look like a harpy from the old 1960s "Jason and the Argonauts" for some reason. I guess an evil female flying monster with claws and a taste for humans got me thinking.

Nice little resolution with Kylith. He seemed like the sniveling lackey type you'd expect to see at some overlord's side in other stories. Nice little way to 'fix his little red wagon.'

So, we see that Korin's gone a bit crazy, though I would've expected such a realization to take a bit longer, but, then again, Ylyia is a goddess, not a human. So we finally have a foe realized who's on par with her level of powers, or at least a rough match. That's a good thing, since a lot of time, stories about goddesses tend to have a too perfect protagonist, and it's good this one has some limitations.

Okay, there's a bit of backstory here. So Korin seems to be a normal human at this stage who has a goddess fall for him. Might seem nice at first, but let's see where this goes wrong...

So, a bit of backstory. Korin seems to have perhaps 'good intentions,' IE, liberating the world from the corrupt gods, but plans to install himself as one. Sounds like the cure might be worse than the disease. The scene with him seemed a bit shorter than it should've been, though.

Well, it seems there's another deity entering the picture. This a divine family reunion? If so, with these 1984ish deities, it would be quite a spectacle.

Interesting developments, here, but we don't know much about the monk. I'll have to continue a bit more later.

So, the world's social set up is shook up. The Gods seem more like an Orwellian police state mixed with Old Testament Yahweh, rather than the self-righteous deities of normal fantasy. Frankly, I love the twist. The city here seems like the Byzantine empire a bit. Byzantine like empires run by kings that are puppets to Orwellian deities... Great stuff!

Okay, I'm interested. It seems you got a bit of inspiration from the classic poem. Interested set twist to end the chapter though, and seems to set a bit of an interesting past for the protagonist.

Didn't read much but its different from a lot of other things i've read on here. Keep up the good work.

I read through your story, and I really like it. I'm going to have to repeat Urli's question, what is Ylyia? She sounds cool.
I think you have a good plot line going. It's realy original, which I like. So often you find that Fictionpress authors create such unoriginal plot lines... cheers for you breaking off!
Once again, I love your story and update soon!

Eh, not bad. The story and characters ae good. Though you could have had a longer prologue. :D

The last chapters review better have gone through. Lately my computer's been messing up on these. i wrote a reiview. it was a really good chapter, but for now, this one.
-It's a girl? hehe. I thought Ylyi was a guy.
A god. that's awesome. great possibility in that one, and ther's sure to be an interesting background story. i can't wait to find out. eepw riting!

Interesting :)