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S. M. Sargent 2005-10-14 . chapter 1
Hm... I probably would have liked this better if you weren't refuring to the incident as 'the breakup' and the boy as 'the crush' throughout the poem. It makes the problem seem more... trite? I don't mean to be offensive, espically if you wrote this after a real break-up, but that's my opinion on writing. It is very well written, though.
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