|Reviews for Fallen|
| Lerene 10/2/07 . chapter 1
Much love for this story
| Megalo-Otaku 9/20/04 . chapter 1
More, most have more! Stories are getting better. The problem is that this is too short. WHY DO ALL OF THE BEST THINGS HAVE TO BE SHORT! Keep it up.
P.S. Review my story please! _
| Kiilau 9/20/04 . chapter 1
O. Good start, adn nice writing. You had a few structural and gramatical errors. Here are some,(1) "You've given me life and tore away all that I've loved to make me live in torment on Earth." that should be "torn" away. (2) "she shouted now, he voice rising to the Heavens. " should be "her" not "he". (3) "but there is another waiting to be fought and I come back." I am not sure how you want to word that, but it is wrong like this, it doesnt make sense, though I understand what you mean. I just thought you wouldl ike to know, because some people like Beta readers. (not that I should talk, thoug, because I have been accused of needing one myself.) just trying to be helful! VERY dramatic cliffhanger ending, though. I want more! keep writing please! (and p.s. please R&R my story too!) thanks!