Ah! I like where you made the new lines... gives the reader of feel of being PULLED downwards... "tumbling at your knees", I love that, for some reason...
If you want anything for critic-wise... Maybe the last line, is a bit unfitting... but if I read it over, I like it. So, depends, I think... on that way you read it. I loved this, either way! Keep writing!
Inicana