This is a review of the second chapter: You created a sense of isolation well, and the whole forest thing is like tense. Was it inspired by the Bitterbynde? Because that’s what it reminds me of. The Garth character is interesting, and you’ve created allot of mystery and un-explained things that can be used further on in the story. It’s starting to get intense and interesting now, so I think you’re succeeding in making an engaging story. Can’t wait to read more!

That's one heck of a piece of writing, if there is such a thing. The feeling of contrast it creates is amazing, the story builds up a picture that makes the reader shiver, and then the description of the warm wind was almost a relief. -And even the name 'Fhyre' has a warming effect. It's a cool piece of writing to, because it can be used as a prologue, or even left as a short story, because the fact that it leaves the reader wondering makes it a memorable piece. You could do heaps with it!
I also liked the way the sun rose, and the use of descriptive language was excellent in my opinion. A few simple mistakes I noticed was the repetition of 'across' in the first paragraph, and the repetition 'glass' in the sentence where she removes her hands from the glass. I wouldn't worry about them though; I'm terrible at making that kind of mistake.
Great writing, overall I like the use of descriptive words that make a contrasting feel. You've got some talent; I just wish I had as large a vocabulary as you. I'm stuck using a dictionary and thesaurus when I write! It takes me ages; I've spent half a year working on a plot...

Whoa. Man, that was good. Who is this mystery guy... thing... voice... whatever. Ok, I offically want to read more, but I have to go to class in ten minutes. I'll be back later though. You've got skill! Go you! *long distance high-five* Your wording and descriptions are so beutiful and vivd. Wow. I shall be back! Never fear!
-Krisian-

Hi! Very, very good beginning. It intrigues me. I am jealous! I wish I were as good a writer as you! I say this to all people, though: proofread! There are a few mistakes that a spell-check won't pick up on, so you need to read, and re-read many times to get everything down. (Don't get mad and go review my story and be like "Yeah, you suck at spelling! And writing too!", because I said for you to proofread...I just thought it was a useful tip, because alot of people don't proofread their own work.) Besides that, though, it is wonderful! Keep writing, please! P.S -- please R&R my story. (its my first, so no makin fun of me! teehee ^_^)