It's a bit dark, but I can't say much considering I used to write poetry like this... but not as emotional and with so much feeling. Kudos.

i can relate.

Totally is super. I'm nothing of a poet,but, ironically i like poetry, and this is really good. Keep it up!

Nol, you are makeing me nervious!

wow...very...discriptive...love ur poem!

wow. your really getting things up right and left.
anyway, this is so kewl! why do you always manage to get all these good things up? so not fair...

very cool. nice rhythm and flow. keep writing!