thats a great poem, it reminds me of those poor accused "witches" being hung for crimes they did no commit in the olden days. thanks for the review too

Pretty good! J'aime it a lot.

the ending was just amazing...good work! love the way it flows together...

I LOVE THIS! Oh, and about the dream I had, you think it would be someone I like, but I really don't know who it is. Maybe it's a fusion of all the guys I like...dunno. Tootles!

Hey! Nither oh's worked but hey. um... yeh. Design diary. I TOLD U SKOOL!umm. i cannot tell u my mob number cos PPL might ABUSE it. umm...yeh... good poem. keep it up!

The imagery of using a piece of string to life line and the shaky balance between life and death is powerful, to emphasise that soon the string might break, and the girl will be prey to Death. The whole poem flows very naturally. Good rhythm. If it were to be translated into prose, it'll make a poignant piece.

ya your right it is like mine but mine was after a dream i had

That was so sad... but really good. It would be a good story.