so dark and brooding...i love it!

I REALLY LIKE THIS A LOT. YOU HAVE A LOT OF GREAT LINES, BUT THERE ARE A FEW THAT TAKE AWAY A BIT. I THINK IF YOU DELETED THE SECOND LINE, THE "ONLY" IN "I WAS ONLY RELEASED" AND THE 5TH STANZA. IF YOU DON'T WANT TO I THINK YOU SHOULD JUST EMAIL ME A COPY OF THIS POEM WITH THE DELETIONS I SUGGESTED, BECAUSE I REALLY THINK THAT THOSE WILL CHANGE IT FROM GOOD TO GREAT

Well written and dark indeed. Very good too ^_^

Whoa, liked this a lot. Very dark and just amazing! Thanks for reviewing!!

Wow! So darkly gorgeous! Just... wow.

awesome poem, i love the use of child's appetite and immortal's patience, keep it up

Very well written! Nice job.

woh... thats creepy...