| Reviews for My Freakish Little World |
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Alley Rhodes 6/4/05 . chapter 1I liked it alot! keep it up (srry, not good at reviews!) |
swtdreamz101 3/30/05 . chapter 1i guess we all have our own little worlds that we wish to keep from others, yet is the best place to vent- hehe, nice poem |
Black-Passion 11/18/04 . chapter 1i htink the stanzas should be a little longer, just so theres more space between the repetition; also: variation is always (well, almost always) better than repetition. i htink you should describe your world more. why is it freakish? are their cool creatures in it? (or something to that extent) anyhoo, the point is: we want to *see* htis world, afterall, this is why we clicked on this poem to begin with. |
suey and liuey 9/28/04 . chapter 1'My freakish little world, I hope to grow, Out of this hole,' i thought that it sounded a bit weird... but maybe thts just me! otherwise its not bad. keep writing |
Moroni's Daughter 9/27/04 . chapter 1Odd, and strangely twisted, but I know exactly what you're talking about. Until I did so, I could feel no peace. Thanks for your review on Ocean Waves. -ttfn! |
Lady Julianne 9/24/04 . chapter 1It would be better if there was some description of the freakish little world other than odd, weird, small and cold. But otherwise, good message. |