Excellent flow and movement in this. Vivid descriptions as well. If you discard the details the bigger picture is usually more cloudy.

Lovely and very true. Often we tend to ignore the small things and dream of the "bigger picture" or work towards it, but in fact our destiny is decided in all the small details that make up our life. You have expressed this in a wonderful way, very lyrically and beautifully with the touching and haunting little details you mention.

I like this poem a lot. It made me think. Beautiful work!

good rhythm for one thing and i like the way you've put it. nice imagery. good work there P

nice detail! Well thats what you wanted right?

wow! it definently flows!