claire, an idealistic spectator watching the show of natue. thanks for sharing and keep writing!

p.s. God loves you and so do I!

Fantastical and mystical. I especially loved the 'leaves are twirling in the wind'. Brill! ~DS~

I really like this poem - it's funky and different, bouncing off different subjects, going from serious to carefree in a heartbeat. The line "With a pair of eyes too young to leak" is very impressive.
I would like to know why it says the river at the end though. Just cause? Maybe you could e-mail me, at anyasaffery@hotmail.com. I'd love to know, and maybe discuss each others poetry.
Just a thought - you don't ahve to.
Please continue writing!

i like the imagery you've used...definitely promising =] i especially like the line 'as children's memories lie awake'.

Swet. Ending was surprising and abrupt tho, but good job anyways. You've a cool way of looking at stuff, very original. Keep writing!

=] Sexy poem you've got here. I enjoyed the images invoked.
-Cindy Moon *)

really beautiful. my favorite lines were "with a pair of eyes too young to leak, It is the path of dreams they seek." I liked the rhyming of them. overall really great poem, but I gotta cut this off now because my cat is blocking the screen and being annoying. :) thanks so much for the nice reviews! you really keep me writing! ~Abigail