it flows well while still managing to interpose dialogue and a torrent of images, convulted and perfect. good work.

Great poem! I'm not too good at english, but I can say I have completely understood this one. It gives me a lot of inspiration. Good work!

Great poem.

woah! its awsome!! luv ya!!

So long since I last updated , and so long since I last read something of yours. I really enjoy it, so I'm hoping you write more more and faster faster.:) great poem, I can think of so many people when I read it...

Great poem, I really enjoyed reading it.

Okay, first it should be 'those' not 'dose' and it's 'football' not 'foot ball'. Sorry, just bugged me a little, threw me off from the poem when I read. Anyways, I really like the poem, it's got a flow to it, got a good feeling to it. You did a really good job here. Good work.