i like this, although it does give off a sence of being wrote for a contest instead of something spurred by true emotion. it lacks strong word usage and seems to be formatted in a rather typical way. personally, i feel that this holds back a piece of writing from acheiving its full potential, and often times, i find the potential to be the most exciting part of the writing process.-on another note-in your bio you mentioned your favorite writers. did you mean Orson Scott Card? just wondering because he is also one of my favorite writers (over shadowed by Madeline L'Engle) and seeing as how he is not very well known, i thought it awesome that you listed him. anyways, sorry i typed your head off (normally i'm nowhere near this long winded) but i've taken a bit of interest in you and am now off to read more of your writing! -Smiles and waves--Rozlin