Love the 'at 11PM' repetition. Repetition is awesome.

I didn't really expect the ending. I kinda wondered if she was high or drunk or something but I thought she really was going crazy..

I hand't ecpected that ending at all! It was amazing!Vibrant,discriptive, poetry in prose! _ It was beautiful and powerful, if you don't mind me saying.

That story gave me chills. Seriously, I can't convey how powerful that was. The ending wasn't expected. Lovely, very lovely. *applauds*

Hello. I found this piece of work quite good, I liked the different points of view portrayed and how you worked with those to reveal different aspects of the girl's character. I especially liked the part 'The dark night, the smell of the grasshoppers, formed the set and soundtrack of her climactic movie scene.'. It made quite a big impact on me.
Anyway, keep it up.
Do read and review some of my work too, (if you have time), especially the latest (Gamine), I really need some feedback on that. Thanks )