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Reviews For: Cold

HeatherLee 2008-02-10 ch 11,	abusewow you have to keep writing!! i see that you havent updated in a while but i hope you havent forgotten about this story. i am very interested to see where the "romance" comes into play. really good job and good descriptions. keep going!
MyNameIsMad 2006-10-02 ch 1,	abuseGood intro. "It felt like some great set of eyes was sweeping around, and nothing wanted to draw attention to itself." I love that line. It's suitably chilling for a story about vampires. Keep it up! -Mad
Xerophyte 2006-08-10 ch 1,	abuseI definately like the first chapter. Your style is good. The first chapter is a bit short...but that's ok. I hope I get a chance to read the rest of the chapters today. This is a good start. One stylistic nitpick: In the first three sentences (which were excellent for setting the scene, by the way), you used the word 'it' a lot, which made them a bit confusing and difficult to read. No grammar problems! Yay for another gramatically correct writer on FictionPress! Great start -Xero
cluttered soul101 2006-04-20 ch 11,	abuseYou gonna make her kill him? Or is this going to be a little longer. it wouldn't be very cool if it just ended there. I don't think so anyways. But, just asking for the sake of asking.Nicole
SummerBreeze83 2006-04-20 ch 11,	abuseDante is a little jerk, isn't he? Yeesh! Poor Sheyenne...having that forced upon her. One question though..if she is a witch, in the beginning wouldn't she have noticed that something was wrong with him? Even that he was slightly weird? Or did I miss that part? I am so sorry if I did...But anywho! Really good story so far. Just becareful to make sure that each time the person speaking changes, that it gets a new paragraph. You did that once or twice. :) Bravo! ::throws confetti::
A Beautiful Nightmare 2006-04-17 ch 10,	abuseGah! Most of your chapters are so short, which means you need to update soon. Hehe... keep going!
cluttered soul101 2006-04-17 ch 10,	abuseDam. He didn't waste any time did he. He's offal. Morgana is in quite the perdicament. Well... It would be kinda cool if he got a taste of his own medecine. But then, it would be even more interesting if she killed him. Are you going to have them suddenly fall in love or something? That would be really strange. Like strange for even books and stories like this. anyways, Souper cool and great. I hope that you update soon. is this going to be short? The reason I ask this is because of the pase that things seem to be traveling. It's just like he's moving souper fast and everything is going quickly. I'm glad that she still faught though. I'm souper glad about that. I was getting kinda annoied because I was like upset that he seemed to be all powerful. that annoied me cause she had her own powers but couldn't do anything. I guess if she could, then that would sorta ruin the entire story huh.Anyways,update soon,Nicole.
Tragic1987 2005-10-24 ch 7, anon.	abuseSo far an incredible story, I hope you continue it and I will be watching for it.
M.R.Sanner 2004-10-20 ch 5,	abusewow !Execellent (sp) storie ! Imean wow ! Very good . Lol ur either wiccan or u study it ! But w/e keep it up!! U should cheek out some of my stories - blaqdeath
Dragonluver 2004-10-13 ch 1,	abuseNice keep up the work ( i suck at writtin but i love it sh -_^)
Leclair 2004-10-08 ch 1,	abuseThe first line really caught my attention and lured me into reading more. I like it. Update.
Minus the Bear 2004-09-28 ch 1,	abuseAh! I like! You must write more! Me wants to know what happens! Hmm, this has caught my interest! Great job with the description!

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