The first chapter wasn't great. I thought, "Been here, seen this. Oh, nanobots. Hmm . . ."

Then I read the second chapter. It was decent, building upon a theme. But really, it was not until the third chapter that I was struck by the scope of the entire story.

Here you have carefully fashioned this "Astralverse" (coin that if you want :D ) of characters, including Morhi, who "crossover" between various plots and stories. Yet I don't think I truly grasped the immensity of such a 'verse until this story, when I realized who this "Collection" really is--I think that you've finally captured the ability to make the reader see that both sides think their standpoint is the right one. I applaud you on the mechanism of your entire Astralverse.

This is very cool. You really get to see Morhi in a lot more dimensions here. ^__^ I cannae wait for the next chapter.
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~~Mera

This was a much needed building chapter...I like what you have revealed here, and the miscalculations that were made by our cyborg friend made the chapter easily readsable. I like his confusion regarding her reaction to the change, and how he thinks she is so animalistic.
I think that they will be shown a thing or two by thier prodigy if they are not careful!
I was confused by the reference of the Upgrade at the end of the story though...are we talking about E-C-12's cybernetic eye? Or something else...
The next phrase said makes the matter even less clear...I was thinking that perhaps they were talking about her upgrade, not his...
Anyway a very good entry! Will be back!
Darwin

So they don't even know that they are to be roboticized (Oh, I coined a word!) until it's already happened? There aren't swarms of people attempting to line up to audition to become robots?
Robots have a fashion sense? 0_0
I can't remember, why is metal bad for Morhi? Or it just is?
Hmm.. So this happens very late, after everything else. You just had to go ahead and sneak that snake hair in there, didn't you?
Do her snakes work like the nanobots, in a way? Oh! I have an idea!
He's gotta have a weak point. Theres a theory (GOSH, I've got to make you read some Asimov!) (well, I think it's proven, so not exactly theory) that in any computer, there is one circut that all functions must pass through. He's gotta have a main brain somewhere. If the nanobots can be remotely controlled (as they obviously can, crawlin back to im) then it doesn't nessesarily have to be on his person, but...
"...I had five mediums of spraying it." Explain.
If you forgot about the accent, go back and change it! A story should NEVER stand as first written, you should know that.

sensors, not censors. A censor is the person who makes the little black lines and makes the tv go *bleep* on jerry springer.
Why does it matter which human is chosen, if they are *perfected*, if you will, by the upgrade? What else do you need besides one strong enough for the upgrade?
Why was he taken offline?
"the occasional plant..." I love that line.
I recall something out of a book by the founder of robotics.. The designations of the robots were formed into the names... For example, a specific story, it was the JN series, and most robots were treated like males, so they were going to name it John, but for some reason it became the Jane series. I'll lend you the book...
Superior fighters indeed. Women almost always have stronger, if not faster, legs, and upper arm strength is relative.
Why make cyborgs at all? Why not just entirely robots?
(Robots can think quickly on one line. Humans can multitask, but don't think as quickly.)
How do you punish a robot? Kinda like the ol' "How can a meal be happy? If there exists a happy Meal, then does there exist a sad meal?"
"lover her he would"? WTH?
"Ke sera sera" Hm?
Do you know where the word robot came from? It might make an interesting discussion if you did.
I'm ill, so forgive my ramblings.
~Syluna

hooray for you. some spelling erros, but nothing particularly detracting. I figure I should read all of you interconnected stories to better know what the hell is going on. update soon.

hm. you did say "N-H-7 7 7" and "H-N-7 7 7". as to the conflict, my mistake. I must have been half-asleep. you also did mention "E-C-7 7 7" who is portrayed as being in the room at the same time as "H-N-7 7 7", so I am lead to believe they are separate people. then there's "E-C-12". are there three people in the room?

*Heh* I must go back and read the rest of Tiger X1...No I'm sorry I didn't recognize her!*Runs and hides!*
Guess I should have known by the patch of discolored skin on her face...(And the thought had crossed my mind) the snakes in the hair also threw me off!
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Whoo! She is definitely PO'd! It is too bad you mutilated her! Though I see the potential for the story and for her!
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I saw no real grammatical things to complain about in this chapter! Thank you for explaining the designation! It is more clear now!
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Well gotta bounce for now! Good stuff...how about some more Op: Scorpion?
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Where you been for reviews? SNIFF I miss the input!
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Darwin

Heya
Reviewing as I go here... I like cyborg stories...
Some nitpicks first,
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-"Censor" is to withhold or omit, verbally or in writing...I think you wanted "sensor" a device to detect information.
-There is one place where you typed N-H-7. (make that a couple times)
-This line is a bit awkward, "The rumor through the internet throughout the entire Collection was that he had sustained so much damage on purpose, to free himself from the Collection" It might read better if you took out "through the internet", and left it "throughout the entire Collection".
-"...he had been like as {an}(You have and)Organic."
-I'm sure your getting to this but what does each designation mean? First, and last initial and a production number?
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Interesting...now which of your Deathraptors is this? Hm...Snicker! It could be a huge mistake to make one of those a cyborg! Already strong and powerful and you're gonna add hydraulics and pistons! OYE! WE could have a problem!
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Very interesting start! Will be back to read more when you post another chapter!
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Later
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Darwin

interesting. a well-written, mildly satirical piece. i think you confused E-C-12 and H-N-7 because you once wrote "E-C-7". You also write "The previous day, the robot known as D-C-13, a warrior-class cyborg, had been taken offline..." then "H-N-7 was very, very old. He had been Upgraded so many times that he was no longer the cyborg he had been in his youth. He was a Nanobot creation, built out of many millions of tiny machines shaped like little crabs, each infused with his personality and linked together by a network of wavelengths that no human had even thought of on his world.
When D-C-13 had been taken offline, he had been young". either that was a foray into different perceptions of time, or an accidental conflict. anyway, update soon.