Gr... Katt, why can't I be this good? *pouts in frustration*...
I think it's just me, but there's a twinge of familiarity in the words... like maybe I've heard this before. Though I am baffled by the deja vou, I cannot begin to say how awestruck I am by the word flow and structure. I'm also mad that you got to use your punctuation... Damn computer!
I notice you used a man's perspective... that's an interesting twist. I know others have used it and usually it is more or less a solidified destrutor to poems (at least the ones I read). However, I find this one is actually better this way.
Another thing, I'm much into the words and rhymes. Good poetry generally leaves an impression and a side effect vision from its descriptions. Maybe it's just that I suffer from many visions, but I'm really impressed with the picture I can draw from your use of imagery. Usually, I do like a varying word order and lots of big words, but there's no need to rant about that for this one!
Question: Is this one of your songs on the CD?
Luv and Peace,
Alyssa

Quite ethereal. I can almost hear this to the music of Battle of Evermore... Or something of the like. Beautiful lyrics.

That was really good! It reminded me of something from Lord of the Rings...very good!