Okay. This is a desperate attempt. If this works then I'll be very happy. I have been trying to review your "Love Monster" for awhile because I love it and I have heard your call for concrit (in the writersblock group).
This is the review for LOVE MONSTER
I liked it. Gave an interesting image. With the first stanza though the last two lines "Our lips dissolve into
/Each others" doesn't seem to work that well. Something besides "each others" like "Our lips dissolve into one" (just an idea) You needn't even have the last line.
Also with the structuring of your lines and the placement of your punctuation stilts the effect a little. At the beginning of the second stanza, you could put the "a" at the end of the first line on the next line. (sorry if that didn't make much sense). It continues like that throughout with some parts which throws the reader a bit.
The descriptions are good though. I like the "claws that are my hands" and the "tongue becomes a snake". They help to convey the animalistic nature of the poem.
I enjoyed this but if the structure was more organised the effect would be helped greatly. Some times its hard to really make sense of it because of that.
I hope you took this as con-crit because I was hoping to give that! Good work with it though, I love the ending to of the one beautiful love monster.
.:flash:.
oh and i don't have time at the mo to review "Wishes" but i will eventually.

Brooke - a piece of pure imagination and beauty