Love the topic idea. It's understood by so many yet barely ever touched.

I liked the first line of the first stanza, but I'm not sure about that comma after "into feeling once more like,". It doesn't seem like there needs to be a pause, unless you want it to sound disjointed and like the perfection is falling away, in which case I would have switched it with the hyphen after peace, so: into feeling "once more like- / sifting away from peace,".

I loved the phrase "infected interior". It sounds so creepily detatched and cold. The fifth stanza summarizes the entire idea of the poem up very well, except for the fact that if she's taking her last breath, then she's dying too.

Another suggestion is to not use all the "does"es. ie: "a pale face does show", "a reflection does maim", ect. If you put it into present (a reflection maims), it brings it more into perspective for the reader and also quickens the pace. Um, but yeah, that's just me.

Anyways, wonderful work. I completely associated with and appreciated the topic.

I like this. Captivating.

I love the shortness of each verse. It adds to the overall emotion, I think, and the semi-archaic use of language as well. I especially like the second verse, it flowed and sounded so good!
I love your poems.
- Jo

i liked this one uber much
it is...how shall i say? different?
not just from what you write, but different in general
now, i will not bore you with the literature critique, but i must say, i liked this very much
it wasn't just what you talked about, or the way you said it, it was just...how it sounded
perfect

you beautifully expressed a feeling that Ive had many times.. awesome job