 Brittany 2004-10-22 . chapter 1 Very whimsical, it reminded me a lot of Dr. Suess. I liked how your rhymes actually fit in with what you were talking about, although when you got to "like a needle in the hay" and "though I do not pay" it seemed like you just needed rhymes. Not that they're bad, mind you, they just don't fit as well as the others do. Over all a good poem. |