nice. i can really feel this. keep writing!

thats pretty cool too

Nice poem. Personally I'd prefer it if the last line was "Can you help this girl? For the beauty's lost on me." Keep 'em coming!

I liked the questions and the imagery was great. I also liked the rhymes here! keep up the great work

wow.
I loved this.
You are very detailed in your work.
Hope to read more of your stuff.
Toodles
Deep Shadows