This is just... Wow! Honestly! I am not usually one for disjointed, dislocated poems, but this was just so amazingly done - and the formatting was perfection to a tee. I cannot find a single thing wrong with this poem. I liked both the formatting and the use of capitals, for it really advanced the manic/hyper/disjointed feel of the poem you were trying to create. Honestly, it's superb! And Favourited!

- clap trap, from review marathon [link in profile]

I love this. I wish I could give you some creative, constructive feedback, but I don't actually know why I love it. I just do.