This is one of the best stories I have read on this site. I dissapointed it just cut off. I would like to find out what happens next please continue with the story. You have written a great story so far.

This was a good chapter, was really surprised with the return of locke, got over his death long ago. Lolz, he reminds me of a super spy, what did he learn on his travels? The ways of the ninja? Lolz.

Hmm, strange, I thought the Ionians tried to venture outward from the sea and gave up because of the never ending cliffs. Well I suppose the Craulin's might have more sophisticated ships or better navigators, but from Locke's point of view the ship was nothing special. And cannons too? Does that mean they also have guns and other explosives? And is Locke even familiar with the concept of a cannon? I thought the most advanced thing Ionians had was that crossbow-like bridge maker they used to get across the fire river.

Eh, so many questions, guess I'll just wait for the next installment, update soon

This was a good chapter, a lot happened in it and I couldn't stop reading till the end of it. In fact, I think this had enough material in it to to be split up into several chapters, but it's still good the way it is. You know, in a way it kind of reminded me of that movie Brave Heart, lolz.

There were a few typos, and a couple of confusing sentences like the bit "becoming for familiar with", little things like that. Nothing a quick re-read can't fix.

I read the last chapter as well when you first updated it, but I didn't leave a review, just out of laziness I guess, lolz.

Hmm... I wonder what is to come of Sanchen and his adopted people? Hell, did they even win? Well either way, they've earned their honor, and honor earned is more noble than honor inherited.

Ah, the plot thickens. In all honesty, it's killing me to know what happened in the Great Disaster, and where you're taking this story.

A massing army, a fabled land which survived a disaster, friends trapped within the belly of the beast, I wonder what is to become of them all?

Bah, sorry for taking so long to review again, work and laziness have gotten the better of me.

But man, you put me in a horrible spot with this cliffhanger here, I curious about how everyone is doing. Maybe it would have been better if I haven't had read it, lolz, jk. Nice chapter, though a bit on the corny side, but I thought it was still good.

Ouch, though lost should be an integral part of any story, still... ouch...

I'm surprised that Gram didn't have that much stamina, living in the mountains, especially 7k feet, is quite the work out. Well, one can't blame him, situation he was in and all.

Hmm... I wonder what happened to Levine and the rest of the expedition, I suppose that's the down side of having so many main characters, you have to update often enough so that people remember them all.

Hmm... ghost, a fitting title for him, lolz. I was a bit suprised that they didn't use arrows or some sort of projectile, and that everything they wore and lived in was white in a sea of red sand.

Also, it seems that the three kingdoms are a utopia, and the Craulins are the exact opposite, do I sense an allusion to the clash of pure good and evil? lolz

It's a shame you don't update that often, I've grown quite attached to Keirian and co.

Aww... that was a nice chapter, it left me with a nice fuzzy feeling, lolz.

Well it's nice to know that one of them is doing ok, but I can only imagine what the others are going through, especially Kai-Thalia. I hardly expect that thier situations are anything like Carson's, lolz

oops, i meant eleven, my bad, lolz.

Yes, yes! the Great Disaster. I have a very strong feeling that the overall plot will have something to do with this.

Gret imagery, the country of the Three kingdoms are a spitting image of the Bliss wallpaper, lolz.

Lookin forward to seeing the fates of the other seven, update soon.

Whoa, almost got me there, I seriously thought u were gonna kill them off, lolz. What can I say? I'm hooked to ur story, especially the characters.

I really wanna see wat happens in the future, and how they get out of this situation.

update soon.

Another great chapter, I can see the red sands of Azurbez and fissures the Currigarra. Excellent imagery as always.

Good chapter, very action packed. Its a shame you dont update often, I've grown attached to your characters, lol.

But you need those spaces though, like you have diffrent people talking but its all mashed into the same paragragh, one after the other like its the same person, it gets confusing trying to discern whose talking.

excellent work though, keep it up.

u need more spaces between ur sentences, especially after dialouge. makes it easier to read. besides from that i liked this story very much.

This is good work. Excellent imagery, its almost like im there myself, lol. I'll go read part one before I continue part two.