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| Freeha 2004-10-05 ch 1,  | abuseRough. The wording is...rough. You ought to smooth it out. It's like walking down the sidewalk in bare feet, and you step on a rock. Don't leave it there, pick it up and move it out of the way. I've got to say that you have a lot of rocks in this poem. Smooth it out, and it'll be a master piece. Celestial Child |