just finished reading all 13 chapters. this story is pretty original. it's pretty cool. i enjoyed reading it. although, you could break up the paragraphs a bit. it was a bit tedious to read such big long paragraphs. especially in the fight scenes, it'd make things easier to read.

keep on writing!

This is the third time I've tried to review your story today, and both times the crappy computer at my school ate my review and laughed at me. So now I'm home, and hopefully this will work. =D

Okie dokie, critiques first:

You need to space out your work more, because its rather hard to follow. It's gotten better as the story's gone on, but you should take a new line if someone is speaking, because conversations that are scrunched together are harder on the eyes.

You also need to watch your tenses, although again, this has improved over the course of the story but at the start you were wavering between past tense (he was happy now that he was a superhero) and present tense (He is happy now that he is a superhero). A writer who changes tense makes it very frustrating for his readers.

I would also advise you to tone down your character descriptions. There's nothing wrong with detailed descriptions, as they give the reader a clear view of the character in their head, but you take it slightly too far. For example:

"He had green and yellow armor, with vines coming out from his back, leaves on his gloves and boots, and grass-like hair."

Leafy's description is detailed, but it's also rather clumsy. But Windy's description:

"She had blue and white armor, and had white flowing hair."

Is perfect. It's neither too sparse nor too detailed.

I really liked this story, but then I'm a total sucker for superheroes, I love them to bits. It was a fun read, and I can tell you had fun writing it. I'll be checking out Cyberman 2, but I wanted to read this one first. So expect more reviews from me soon.

(By the way, I know that I hate it when people say this in their reviews, but if you have the time or the inclination, perhaps you could read my story? I only ask because my story's also about superheroes, so if you're into them you might enjoy it. You don't have to, of course, but I would be very grateful if you took the time to do so =D.)

A new story, new villians and new, uh, story. can't wait!

Yeah, why am I the only one reveiwing this? I'll try an' find some other reveiwers, now were'd I put my death ray . . .

For such a powerful sounding virus Lord Spookuh seems kinda short. Hope he's not sensitive about it. I don't want my computer crashing just because of this reveiw.

His first superhero team up and his identiy is reveild. Poor guy. Giant worms ROCK!

So if Atom knows who lord Spookah realy is then he must have hacked onto Spookah's computer. So, wouldn't Spookah be alble to figure it all out?I am kinda sad to see Buzzkill go, he had real villian potential.

Atom 'eh? so what exactly is he capable of? Weapon despensing? Reality manipulation? Energy blasts? Power enhancement? I'm all 'atwiter' with anticipation, whatever that means.

So, are you gonna start updating daily now? and what'll happen if some one unplugs his computer?

Ooh! He can make copies of himself, funness! I'm getting the feeling that someone is behind all these big type viruses. Continue at your leasure.

How did I miss this chapter getting posted!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?Spider legs, Godzilla regects, Barns and Noble's, this has got it all!

Rock, rock on, man. Still awsome.

Your story is so boring I could not belive it.

Awsome. Awsome plot, awsome costume. Just Awsome. Please update soon.