A great poem. Some of my stuff is written like that. Floating Up is one that has this sort of meaning behind it. A great message. Keep writing.

Deep...and profound. I really liked this one. I've been here sometimes my own self. But never this deep. I really like your style, it has something different that a lot of what I read. I believe it is your simple language, the manner in which you talk about your subject.

You talk about the subject...but you're kind of detached, kind of (but not completely) pessimistic about it. Yet I can still tell that you care about what you speak about.

That's a difficult thing to do, my friend. Nice!

when they asked me what was wrong i said nothing
i turned around and whispered to myself everything

I absolutely love that ending.. Im sorry you had such a bad day, but that poem is awesome!