hey chenman

this is really good, and its got a Fallen Angels ring to it. some of the quotes are really funny, and make you think. vocabulary is very expressive

probably ur going to explain later, but some of it is confusing, although it does its job as a hook

Awesome job, and keep on writing-- if u leave your story unfinished i'll be really ** at you

GREAT CHAPTER! I must say that that was beautifully written.

"When the Soviets come here, they’ll rape us so bad that the sex will be consensual."

I thought that was funnier than all hell...God...that would suck...

I must admitt that I am very curious as to what exactly happened to America. I'm also curious as to what year it is. I suppose that is to come in later chapters.

That would be horrible to know that you were on a suicide mission. I like how you really explained how Saunders had the feeling he was going to die. It was good and I can't wait to continue onward with the story.

And By the Way: Thanks for your review of my story! :)

Nice David, Nice

hey, not bad of a story. original plot, good grammar, good spelling. i saw this story and review it on FFN too, it kind of didn't belong. but then again, i've been trying to review your story for a while now...this is the first time i haven't gotten an error. anyways, not bad, but who are the Klitchos, exactly? what has happened so far? explain these parts and that will help the readers a lot.
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hey sup dave, i enjoyed readin that. you should add some symbolism in ur first few paragraphs, that would make it sound very proffesional and deep. i like how you used the "titanic" comparison. your writings good. you didnt try to force too many vocab words. a lot of writers do taht, it just makes it more confusing. good job keepin it clear and entertainin'. Peace out chigga