coolness!!totally wayy cool.i like it!is there any continual to it? you should write more stories like this. i enjoyed it so much. it was gripping me until the end. i knew it had to finish it and i did.GREAT JOB !

I think you should have used someone other than the cliche pool boy. You're a very strong writer, Ankney. I'm impressed. There should be more scenic detail, to put the reader in the story. Maybe make it unbearably hot. That'd match the tension. Yeah.

not bad, a bit confusing, but interesting. They really don't seem like diary entries to me, though, more like switched points of view, but that isn't how a girl normally rights in her diary, but definitely how she thinks...

Bunny

Chris, this one is just weird. This is totaly not your usual style. I think the little contest ideas would have been great if we'd actually all written what we were supposed to. I guess you win by default. At any rate, good work, Chris. It's not usual for you, and it's creepy, but it's still enjoyable. Chris you are amazing and I worship your l337 skillz.

WhOOt
You make me feel like maybe I need to work a little bit harder on my composition.
You're a really fantastic author, and I wonder if perhaps you should start looking around for literary mags to publish some of your short stories in? Or if you already have, maybe post the names so we can see them?
I looked at most of your stories, and I fail to see a bad one in the bunch. Really good job.
Thank you for taking the time to review me. You obviously know what you're talking about.
~Keep writing!
Orfan