Yay, Mikey gets a shot! I hope we'll see a bit of Alex and Cal in there too, just for the hell of it.

It's really good hope yopu get more up soon...

DREADS! This Man has DREADS!(No, the girls doesn't love dreads and dowsn't absolutely hates her school for forbidding dreads. Die, School, Die!)

Mikey's story :D (and Man With Dreads!)I have one word to say for it: Nice!

And lastly: somehow, I feel just like katherine.

SWEET MOTHER OF...PEARL! NOW THAT'S WHAT I CALL FANCY! I heart your grandpappy!

It's a Mikey story!!

Thank yous very very much!

Now, the first chapter was good, I like the prose heavy writing style at the beginning, and the wry humour makes the whole thing interesting even if there isn't much going on yet, and then of course there's Mikey, and i think i'm in love.

Update please:)

Really good so far! ^^ Great start; the chapter title is especially eye-catching. I dunno, but something about the phrase, "The Fantastic Umbrella Factory" just made me go, 'Ok--*this* I've gotta see.'

And also, YAY~ Mikey-centric story! Wasn't enough of him in "I'm Here" in my opinion. He and Alice have been sources of great amusement for me for the past 2 days or so. ^^

Please update this soon--I'm looking forward to it.

--S.K.-chan

Next chapter? Soon? PLEASE?!?!

*holds out her hands*

more please!

Nite: *POUNCE* GLEEP!

It took me a while to find this, but I'm glad I did. It's great.

Yay! There's another one! I love Mikey! Go him! He's the most adorable flirt, and I'm rather liking the way Danny is shaping up too... Keep at pleasey!

Truthfully I didn't read all of it, I skimmed the last few paragraphs. But I have to commend you on your dialogue, it's very well written and incredibly realistic. It's exactly what people like Danny and Mikey would say.
So good job, great start, and I'm sure I'll read the rest when it comes.

Mikey-ism! I came online, going, "Dude, I need mush fiction," then check my email. "New story from Shades of Twilight." DUDE! *reads*
*glomp* This is why the world protested towards a Mikey-story. X3 I love this. LOVE it. The characters are BRILLIANT and their personalities come across wonderfully. They're so vivid it's like you're standing in the room with them, gigging and wishing YOU were a gay man. XD! And now I'm envisioning them all happy and snoggy. . .*le sigh* Torturous, lovely; torturous!
Can't wait for another chapter! Seriously! WRITE, WOMAN! *jumps her hypocritically* 8D; Have fun with "Logic" (this still amuses me -- sorry).

Dude, quite rocking. I really like your characters, and your dialogue always beats mine into the ground. One would-be hippie to another - dreadlocks rock. Now... onto the suggestions (I actually took notes! Yay!)
First sentence:
Would the narrator really 'notice' in passing that his cheeks were freckled? Yeah, I realize that you're trying to add in description gradually (which I love, by the way), but it just doesn't work there.
Para 7:
Exempt - seems a bit repetative since you used it to describe the highway vs. shore bit. Also, "hell, San Francisco just is." Hell needs to be capitalized.
Para 8:
"all of it." All needs to be capitalized.
Para 16:
"sea- shell lined..." Seashell lined? I know you don't need the dash, but I'm not sure if it's one word or two.
M All that aside, quite beautimous. I am looking forward to an update.
~Sasa

SHADES I AM MADLY IN LOVE WITH YOU!
*pounces*
can't wait until next chapter!