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| Tanaka Sakura 2007-01-19 ch 1,  | abuseWhoa that is creepy. I never heard of this rumor before, maybe it was really creepy and you did a good job with it too. |
| Tessabe 2005-02-25 ch 1, | abuseA little short, but it does grab the attention. |
| Tinsoldiergirl 2004-11-05 ch 2, | abuseit's so creepy! I love it! It's written beautifully. and btw, my dad's a ploice officer, so if you need, you can email me and I can give you suggestions. ;) +favesz |
| Sharap'n 2004-10-26 ch 2, | abuseThat's nice, that's different, that's unusual, I like it. Very nice. I reckon that they will eventually get the door open and find... NOTHING. spooky... Peace. ~SP |
| Zeila E 2004-10-20 ch 2, | abuseOh- I'm curious to know what happens next. The story's quite interesting so far. :3 Please update soon? ^^ |
| Make me with Beautiful Line... 2004-10-19 ch 2, | abusehaha still loving the story. i like how it is suspenseful, but becareful. i mean a girl who doesnt exist in a house...its been done so many times, so while im sure u have something shocking and good and all to add to the story line since u decided to write it, it would be a good idea to add some of those in soon so that it doesnt become just another girl who doesnt exist/ghost thingy. haha i do like how u write the chaps so i'll read updates regardless of what u do, so update soon. |
| Make me with Beautiful Line... 2004-10-18 ch 1, | abusewow i love the ending where the lines go dead. haha so looking forward to updates. |
| redmoonmidnight 2004-10-18 ch 1, | abuseGreat start! You should continue. I like the story (prologue), but just my personal opinion: unless it has something to do with the plot, I think the story would be more intriguing if you dropped the "A" from the title and just called it: House on Sparrow Lane. It seems much more dramatic. Other than that, I've enjoyed the beginning. You may want to go into (more) details and make the quotes more nominative, during the actual story. :) I'd appreciated if you r/r some of my work! Au revoir, adios, sayonarra, bye! |