Wow! This is so great. Its unbelievable. You still have a few typos and grammatical errors (my sister finds them, but I am unsure) butlike you said, final edit soon. Good luck! I don't think you'll need that much to get published.

...interesting. truly. Now to the sequel.

ah...interesting. Will that be his adopted son? Now...UPDATE.

This is so sad. ...you should put the subject as fantasy, a bit of angst and romance, althought that isn't really part of it, since all of his lovers are gone- the ones that he cares that is.

WOW! This is awesome. I knew you could write good, but wow. also you are a very mean liar.

I finnally read it and figured out how to get in to read it and I am glad.This is really cool

Great job! Very dramatic sequence, gave me chills every time!