I might be late on this review but who cares right as long as you are getting one. I got to say this is very good I hope this isn't the end of the story but if it is this was great. your writing style is very good and I think this is one of my most favorites so far that you have written. keep up the good work

That was very sad, but excellently written. You've really managed to pin down your style now. The atmosphere that was trailing after Akila throughot the whole chapter especially in the library was so intense. It rocked, cant wait for the next chapter-Keith Andrew

Great, character development, rather nice to. I like the humour. Very good, keep it up, i cant wait to read more-Keith Andrew

That was hilarious. One minor suggestion: While I don't mind it, some people might be a bit put-off by the amount of swearing. Perhaps you could tone it down a bit. Again, just a suggestion. Really funny chatper and I liek Gareth already. One line really got me. "You were staring at me. I don't like to be raped by people's eyes." I almost died laughing at that. Keep it up! ~Nfinity

Wow. That last paragraph just blew me away. That kind of introspective stuf really draws your readers into who your character really is and that helps the reader to relate to your character in a more easily recognizable way by putting her in a situation where many people have been before. Keep it up!~Nfinity

That was cool.. but you know.. not only is there a vow ofabstinence, but also cursing is a no-no. aAnyway, helpful hint of the day: Try telling us more about the things in your story, like the church, or even your main character. What does she look like? How does she relate to other characters. I'm probably getting ahead of myself here, though. Must read some more. ~Nfinity

I loved it! That's how I've always imagined my first dragon-slaying adventure to be like. Adn the last sentence was awesome and reminded me so mcuh fo a friend of mine. Anyway, going ot read some more. Nfinity Nite Monaghan

Very good, Akila's back, the child genius. This is getting very interesting. Keep up the good work, you're really getting into the story now-Keith Andrew

Nice diversion from the story. Its getting interesting, not that it wasn't nefore but its moreso now. keep it up-Keith Andrew

Hey suspense, what is Sakura, or who. Yes nicely written. Keep it up. thanks for the review on mine by the way, there's an update coming in a few days, keep up the good work-Keith Andrew

lol i loved the ending. Poor gareth though. Nicely done. -Keith Andrew

Hey very good. Youre really getting good at telling the story. Hmm.. i wonder what will happen next. Keep it up-Keith Andrew

Hey cool a bit disappointing that the fight had to end in mid sequence, pretty cool though. I can't wait for the next part. nice work-keith Andrew

Hey cool, new characters. This looks interesting. Plot progression. Very nice introduction. Keep it up-Keith Andrew

Great, youre improving as you go along and the first hint of a somewhat deeper and more complex plot as well, Who is the strange robed man? and how does he know Aithne? interesting, i have to say i'm hooked. Well done-Keith Andrew