wow, this is amazing! XD

i love how you write! i want your talent! i am having a bit of trouble with my own OO

anyway, since i am absolutely worn out from today, i am going to bed

goodnight

If you're doing what I think you are, AMAZING symbolism! (I'm seeing you as the Wind Walker and you're facing some internernal conflict or some obsitcal in your life that it's hard to overcome) Amazing. Like a story! Work a little on your flow, but most poems of this type needs it. Excellent! You should make this a longer series!

Write hard, write long, write until dawn~TLDG

p.s. It would be fun to make a poem chain of stories like this with other people, if you can find someone to do that with. (I'd be intrested!) It might be fun with more then one person as well. Build up a plot, characters each, and write poems, and link them togeather. Jusst an idea XD

I did really love this poem.

again, beautiful!

GREAT, i could imagine that in a book, or an animated movie... i could actually imagine every word you said

o, beautiful, just beautiful. you should try turnin this into a segment in your story, this would suit it great! nice job!
The King of the Assclowns

Wonderful use of imagry, the picture painted by the words becomes animated within just the first lines. Keep writing!