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Tala Lavara 2008-08-23 ch 25,	abuseWow it's been a long time since I've read your story. I've also not had internet for some time. Your story always takes an unexpected turn. I can't wait for the ending!
Essie 2008-05-04 ch 8, anon.	abuseLove your story!! Can't believe it has been around for ages and this is the first time i have had the privilege to read it. Maybe it's been dusted with fae sprinkles for invisibility. Anyway, i read one of the reviews about changing the dialogue and what i want to say is NO ... i would hate for you to change it to the way the reviewer stated because their example makes me think "oh look! teen writer trying to sound cool. let's read something more worthwhile." I like your fantasy genre dialogue. You've mastered it well and made it sound believable. Also i think fae have a gift of eloquence and would speak as such so keep doing what you're doing. UPDATE SOON!
cherrypiesizzle 2008-01-23 ch 7,	abuseYour story is, well, it's not as if it's too complicated to understand. But, at times, it just doesn't seem like a story to me. I think you're trying too much to get into the writing style; the sort of old-style narration with embellished, pretty words like: “No? As you wish. But it is not the way of the Faey to consort with mortals, princes though they may be.” However, I think you're concentrating too much on it, and less on how effectively it would draw a reader in. After all, looks can only go so far, and it's the same for pretty words. The dialogue, to me, seems very weak and does not quite show character. I understand that Inmar is supposed to be cold, possibly a little arrogant, and believes that he is superior simply because he is a Faerie. Instead of the line above, you could have said: "Hm. Do you really? Very well- as you wish, my queen," his eyes glinted mockingly, "Perhaps you don't know, but Faey do not consort with mortals, even if they are Princes." Does that not show his personality a little more? It gives off some of his enigmatic presence, his doubt of her as queen, his disdain for her human blood and mortals in general, and at the same time reflects his almost noble bearing. Try not to get too carried away with language, because I know I do that sometimes too. It's very easy to fall into. But with the way that you are describing everything, I find myself reading your narration with a British accent in my head. I keep expecting little old ladies to be drinking tea in the garden and chattering away in a posh manner. ...I apologize. If that seemed as if I was mocking you, I am very sorry. Hopefully my constructive criticsm gave you a little insight (I don't believe in flames), and maybe you can start picking out the little nuances in your writing yourself.
cherrypiesizzle 2008-01-23 ch 6,	abuseI think it's a little unrealistic how little reaction...err...the main character (what's her name?) had to the 'Faerie' world. She seems so emotionless; I guess I'm one for character description, but when I read this story, it doesn't really inspire any emotion in me. Maybe that's just me; I mean, I feel like I'm watching the story go by, but not getting involved, which is what I think a story should do to a reader. Anyway, I'm sure there are others who find this story awesome. I just wish that the main character would have a little more emotion, more realistic reactions, and not be jostled around so much! Nobody REALLY gave her a description of their customs, the kind of magic they use, or anything. And then, boom, right off the bat, she gets this random task. I think the pacing is just a little off.
cherrypiesizzle 2008-01-23 ch 1,	abuseAwesome! I love anything with Faeries...have you read Hunter's Moon by...was it O.R. Melling? I think it was. Anyway, that was fantastic. I really enjoyed it and was sucked right into its world...remember, a good author takes you along the ride, instead of letting you sit and watch it go by.
PrematureLlama 2007-12-03 ch 25,	abuseOk, this story is great! Love it! I would write a longer review but I'm in a hurry! I love all the characters and the plot! WONDERFUL! Please please please please update and quick!
A Dark White Rose 2007-10-11 ch 25,	abuseI AM SO SORRY I haven't reviewed. my computer has been down for a LONG time and luck was not on my side on letting get a hold of another one. Anyways your last to chapters was awesome the story flowed and it hasn't slowed or ecome boring orrepetitive and it stillso ...yes it may sound corny but majical and full of thigs i dream about. I love your story and ihope to see you published and hopefully you'll sign it for me :) A Dark White Rose
one 2007-09-22 ch 25, anon.	abusei like it so much but she can't marry an Amarantine, she has to marry INMAR! keep writing and i have a favor to ask please finish AN ODD MISUNDERSTANDING its funny and entertaining as hell
Someone Speshiiil! 2007-09-17 ch 25, anon.	abuseI like it. Its really pretty. Its really well written and makes me smile. You keep writing. I'll keep reading. :D:D
Susurrent Threnody 2007-09-11 ch 25,	abuseWell I stumbled across your story, and I must say I like all of the action. It has a very nice pace. Thank you for taking the time to write it.
Corin Collins 2007-08-15 ch 25,	abuseI am absolutely in love with this story, and just thought that the author should know this. The writing is exceptional, the plot full of twists and surprises (not to mention originality), and I am eagerly awaiting the ending. That being said, please update :D And keep up the great work. (I'll try and make my next review a bit more constructive, but, just know for now that I am a fan that checks this particular piece every day for a new chapter!)
moonlights desire 2007-07-23 ch 25,	abuseyou update only to end so soon! omg! i love this story so much, you don't understand how happy i was to see you had updated! i love how she made up w/ the prince- and how inmar was all jealous! so great! although what is she going to do w/out him and at a new place? that would be awfully strange...but there's a big war coming and i have a feeling that ara's about to become a big part of it...and i love inmar...so hot...such a great story...please update soon!
atreyu love 2007-07-12 ch 25,	abuseoh wow. this is REALLY interesting. i really hope she ends up with Inmar though ;] i love him ^^ haha. update soon, please?
Glass Dragon 2007-07-12 ch 25,	abuseYay! I'm glad that you updated!! This is a lovely story. Hope it continues going the way you want it to!
atreyu love 2007-07-12 ch 1,	abuseinteresting.

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