I like the line "And sighed into each other"

that's a curious ending...

Last stanza-kickass. 2nd to last stanza-AWESOME. You have such a way of phrasing things, so real and raw. As if you were a jaded figment of my imagination, telling me everything, now. I feel as if my comments glance off you, like you aren't real. You seem only to be passion. Wonderful.

"Green-eyed girl seeks her Blue eyed boy, Hopefully he'll be here soon, Green-eyed girl loves her Blue eyed boy, But they don't talk about the moon." Wow. So beautifully sad. This was a really powerful piece- I enjoyed it. Keep it up!

nice and sweet. good job.

its sad... but excellent.. nice job!