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| Gem 2005-02-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseWow, what a portrayal of Lust. I think that you depicted it in a truely malevolent way, which I think is just wonderful. I especially love the twist in the end, and how he will continue with his 'obsession.'AND even the foreshadowing was clever. You captured the essence of this desire, and how evil it can be so well. Great piece indeed! |
| Lady Rex 2004-12-03 ch 1,  | abuseWell...I am really confused by this story, it was good, it had great detail and discription, but I dont really get the plot and what happened in the end. But other than that, it was written beautifully, good work |