I'll be breif ash-chan. There's nothing I can say but I love it!

God damn, Ash-chan, this is good. The words flow much nicer than your other one, I must be honest. I like this one. "Allow me to break away/Sothat I may fall/For you have stripped me of my dignity/And clipped my wings of freedom/" My favorite lines! I luv this one, so trust me, you rock at the whole poetry-writing thing! Go Ash-chan, number 1!
The girl of nothingness,
Alyssa