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| Written 2008-10-17 ch 28,   | er, to clarify on what I mean about POV- it's fine that you choose to tell the story through a side character's POV, but it was sometimes confusing because I forgot about your narrator. if you were to take a similar approach again in a different story, I would do it more like... watson's character in sherlock holmes or something, if I were you. but I'm not and your story is still brill, so take care! |
| Written 2008-10-17 ch 29, | hey, this story was awesome! I could tell that it was one of your earlier works, compared to your other stuff I've read, but it was still quite good. such a great storyteller :) if you ever feel the need to edit, here are my criticisms: small grammar mistakes (no big deal), and the POV threw me off now and then, even though I get that Jewelz wrote the book and stuff. great work and all that jazz. |
| Written 2008-10-17 ch 3, | [if Fenrir was human he would have shrugged or shown some outward sign of disinterest in the matter, but since he was a wolf, his visible emotions were limited to, ‘Come out little pig or I’ll blow your house in,’, ‘I’m going to eat you’, ‘I’m thinking about eating you but not for a while,’ and ‘eating you right now,’.] this is one of the funniest lines.. like, ever. second thought: I've read this story before, but it's been so long that it begs a re read. I cant remember the plot at all! |
| Aranalany 2008-10-10 ch 1, | Just wanted to say that your fic is awesome. It took me 2 days to read it fully, sadly I had to sleep in between, but it sure was worth the time I put into reading it. Thank you for writing such quality stuff. Hope you keep it up. :) |
| Marie 2008-09-23 ch 29, | Amazing story. I couldn't stop reading it! |
| the kitten 2008-09-21 ch 6, | the girl (or goddess) that married hades was called persephone! you had a very good idea with the plot, by the way! |
| MaskedNightingale 2008-09-19 ch 29, | Good ending! Thrilling right to the very end. Are you going to do a sequel? |
| MaskedNightingale 2008-09-19 ch 28, | I was up till' 3 o'clock last night reading this. I love it! You should really think about publishing it. |
| MaskedNightingale 2008-09-19 ch 21, | I'm hooked. |
| MaskedNightingale 2008-09-18 ch 1, | This sounds like its going to be a fun story to read. Different but fun, of course that's what makes it fun. |
| Marie 2008-08-27 ch 6, | It's actually ProserpinA, rather than ProserpinE... |
| Soccerdog12 2008-07-19 ch 29, | CUTE! |
| PrematureLlama 2008-07-06 ch 29, | I loved it. |
| atreyu love 2008-06-27 ch 29, | Haha. great way to end the story :) amazingly CUTE :D i love it!! && i hope fenrir doesnt end up with Tiffany. eww. |
| atreyu love 2008-06-27 ch 20, | Arturo should have never let her stay. and if Fenrir ends up with that bitchy girl, tiffany.. that would suck, and i would hate it XD |