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wow is there a part2 for this story

wow, this is hilarious. i love how angelo popped up in her car and his explanation was, "I'm a unicorn." hilarious!

lol That ending was so funny. This story was really good.

But I wanted to point out something. You changed Gordon's name to Gregory. Because in the chapter where they went out for ice cream and at the dance his name was gordon, but later it was Gregory.

But other than that and a few spelling and grammatical errors, I didn't see anything really big. Good job!

Well, what can I say. I truly loved it. It was a wonderfully original twist on the Beauty and the Beast cliche I've read so many times. Kit was absolutly amazing. You brought her to life very nicley and I saw a lot of myself and other people in her. It was suspenseful but in a way that wasn't consusing. It was great.

On thing I did notice thought is that sometimes you switch POV's. Not for a whole chapter but for a paragraph or two. That's pretty much all I can critique you on. Nice job!

I really like your story, even if I've only just finished the first chapter of it. I plan to read a chapter here and there when I have time (not that you care though, lol).

Anyway, you've definitely caught my attention. You gave just enough information to make the story intriguing (sp?) but you don't drill us with information and presented it in an interesting way.

I don't have much else to say other than, if this were a novel, you'd have my attention and I would definitely read the next chapter. _

yeah I know this is late too but I just found it.. its awesome!