This was good. I'd like to read the rest when its finished. I'll email you later.

Liked it. Finish it soon, maybe you can have the boys be the cause of ther own demise.

Loved it! Maybe the father and daughter could be the cause.

You are very good at describing the story, but it ended too quickly! You also should put a bit more in about how the mist worked and why it let them go; "I concluded that the mist had had enough of them too." is a good joke, but not a good reason. also on that: "Cause & efect" in that order. and for heavens sake, finnish it!
PS: Boys aren't that bad!