I am so impressed with your ability to rhyme so effortlessly and beautifully in your work. This is another example of that, and the concept is fantastic. I love the lines "The world has stopped - half closed its eyes. A moment, bottled, caught in time" Beautiful.

That was really great. It was like listening to the ocean; you get caught up in the rhythm of it, and then don't really know what happened, so you have to read it over again.