i like this tory. it has a different kind of edge to it. I'm glad you aren't afraid to put God in your stories! I'll be reading!

And I'll bet you read/watch Rurouni Kenshin, because it rocks so much.

I think you did the dream sequence rather well... Aarah's behaviour is rather off in seeking comfort in Tay... but then again, we don't really know how she really is, so it can come of as strange to us, but not be strange at all... or something like that.

"There was no way the other door led to another bedroom when they had yet to find the lavatory." - Did they have lavatories in that time? I mean, a toilet would suggest plumbing and things going with it...

Okay... I can understand why a woman would wear 'wraps' at that time... but why would guys wear them?

Good chappie... although she doesn't really fight the fact that he's following her... which is kinda strange.

Sorry I'm only reviewing this now... Blame... er... something ;-) Hey, at least I'm doing it now, aren't I?

Firstly, some thoughts:"You’d have thought that after spending so much time devoting her life to defense and protection that the bad blood in her would have dissipated. But it was there, coursing through her veins as strong as ever." - This part particularly made me think... Because it's so true in many things. I've fought with so many things in my character that seems suppressed until something suddenly releases it and again I am who I was... Only God can permanently take it away. I think with these two sentences you've really engraved a truth not so easily brought to light... It just kind of resonated with me.

Secondly, a note:"But finding out that you, of all people, is that hitokiri…” I think it should be "you ARE" and not "you IS".

this is like another kenshin story, awsome!

It's good. Keep up the good work.

*hugs tight and grins* I don't think I've ever had a dedication before.. thank you ^_^ and I guess I'll forgive you for posting later THIS time.. next time I might.. y'know.. think up a better threat. :P

I love these deeper looks into who Aarah really is... especially when she's finding that out for the first time herself. I'm emotionally involved now :P

And I like the slow friendship developing between Chetayuu and Aarah.. it's cute :D

Great job.. I hope to see the next chapter soon ^_^

Amazing...this one of the most beautfully written samurai stories I've ever read...And exceptionally accurate, too. Amazing...Keep it up, this is wonderful!

This story was recommended to me by our sussie a few days ago, and I'm glad I got time to read it :D

It really drew me in right from the beginning, and I've loved getting to know the characters so far. They're extremely lifelike, with a depth to them I enjoy.

I especially like how you've incorporated a quest for faith into this--not many stories set in feudal Japan can do that ^^

I can't wait for the next chapter, and I am SO adding this to my favourites. *grin*

Though I'm sad that Aarah left Seiya *pout* why??

The revelation was done well... Naturally the question that comes to mind is how exactly Aarah and her opponent actually got to the sand pits... but other than that, really well done.

Sad, but wonderfully done. The detail in some parts and lack of it in others give are wonderful tools to shape this last scene... and finally see a little more into Seiya.

Only one correction: heights and angels - angles?

Good intro of Seiya without giving much as to a visual presentation of him. He's extremely likeable and facinating in his own way. Character expantion on Aarah was also very nicely done. She herself is a curious creature... immediately gaining the readers facinated interest.

The story draws one in immediately. Very well written. Only one suggestion comes to mind: Make a list of words used in the chapter at the end that might be unknown to the reader and explain them. It might give the reader a better idea and understanding.