I tried to sing it, with a tune i kindof made up on the spot. Its true, the words flow nicely when sung.

This is sad, in a fleeting sort of way. The last sentence is the best, but its a little awkward; its length, compared to the rest of it, is too long.

Besides that, well done.

another nice piece. sad, tragic, but nicely conveyed emotions. keep on writing. btw, yeah you got it right. :)

...Sadness...

I like it. Sybolic poetry is awsome, you can create any story to match your life. This one was done pretty damn well.

*Off to read other poem*

I like it. Nice rythem, so rare and hard to find somettimes now. A new ring for the call of the sea is what this poem gave me. The other side to the great gheroic call of the sea where they all come back heroes. I liked your point of view becuae it is so true.

Hey, hun : ) I liked the poem. The rhyme-scheme was interesting (which means neither bad nor good, but interesting) and the subject is very heart-wrenching. Yes, HTML IS good for something...*snickers*

Very, Very good. The way you worded it, the tune was very obvious

Oh my God, my dear Blaze, this is awesome. It's has a great ring to it. I luvs it! -huggles (hug)- Yea! I like it lots. You'll have to sing me the melody, I wanna hear it. It's so catchy and good. I think there's a typo in the line "I spice traders haggles their wares" I believe there is... check it and you got yourself a perfectly done lament!
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