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| Lidless Eye 2004-12-13 ch 1,   | Nice and short... powerful. I like it a lot. Reminds me of some of my shorter works... especially with words like embraced and shimmered. Good description words, makes you feel the poem. ~Lidless Eye |
| sleah 2004-11-29 ch 1, | Hmm, and I thought I was the one with the knack for imagery. Surely, you have jested. ^_^ Hey, guess what! I'm back... ~Yabou ~SL |
| Mime 2004-11-28 ch 1, | This piece is brimming with sheer magic--I loved every beautifully crafted syllable. Really can't wait to see more from you. |
| Jimmy Jazz 2004-11-15 ch 1, | Amazing and powerful piece of imagery, an all round masterpiece, fantastic work. |
| Miz E. Mak 2004-11-10 ch 1, | Beautiful work. I've dearly missed your poetry. Keep writing and may the inspiration be there always. write on. |
| godawful teen-angst poetry 2004-11-08 ch 1, | gorgeous, darling. |
| simpleplan13 2004-10-31 ch 1, | interesting ending.. nicely written.. very pretty |
| ifitaintkatie 2004-10-31 ch 1, | I wish you had made it longer! I really liked the idea of the whole thing, and the amicable yet quite obscure faeries. Maybe you could describe them better? Ok, for your constructive criticism, I would say to use more interesting words (you'd be surprised what a difference they make)! Also, it was too mysterious- why is the person crying out in despair? How did she get to this place? Just something for you to consider. Overall, I liked it! |