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| Shadows Fury 2005-02-02 ch 3,  | abuseHm...for the life of me I would have thought Alrick would have also beena theif or something similiar. Y'know the whole "it runs in the family" sort of thing. But, it's more interesting this way. Um...I loved Relick's whole view on the kitten...Hehehe...I also like the humor between them all. Good dialogue, it was funny to read. I can't wait to see what happens next. UPDATE! |
| Shadows Fury 2005-02-02 ch 2, | abuseA HA! Another well done chapter. *Grins* I'm really starting to love Venna. I like her personality and the way she handles things. Is it just me or does she hold Relick on a tight leash? Hehehe...anyways I can't wait to see their son and how he's like. Relick's so cute he saved the kitten. *Pets Relick on the head* he's so cute in his own little way. Well...I'm off once again to read more of your great fic. *Winks* keep on writing. |
| Shadows Fury 2005-02-02 ch 1, | abuseOh...I came across this and I had to read it. Great frankly I love any fic with theives in them, it makes the story more interesting. This by all means is my favorite. I loved the characters, their unique and very interesting. I like the dialouge and the whole idea of this story. Also the characters names are original, I like that. Anyways, all in all it's a very well down story. This Gaver is he a shapeshifter...or something along the lines of that? I can't wait to see what happens next. *Grins* off to read the next chapters...Bye |
| aknightsgoldenrose 2005-01-16 ch 1, | abuseThis is a nice first chapter. Even though I haven't read your short parody I already like the characters. I especially liked how you did their dialect. Thanks for reviewing my work. :D |
| mizu no kokoro 2004-11-27 ch 2, | abuseI think some of the accents o' and otehr stuff sorta made the story hard to follow, i didn't quite understand what the characters were saying~ but, good work so far and update soon^^~ ~Never the same~ |
| mizu no kokoro 2004-11-27 ch 1, | abuseOh, no wonder the names look familiar^^lol~and i just happened to click on this story too! :Dthieves are kool~^^ |
| ali43 2004-11-14 ch 2, | abuseHey! Another cool chapter (at least I thoroughly enjoyed it.) I like the style of the dialogue. There were a few grammar issues (nothing a quick readthrough won't fix though) The paragraph describing the capital had some lovely word choices and the like but it could use some reworking as there were a few places in it that were awkward to read (not particularly wrong, just not particularly strong.) While I like the rescuing the kitten thing I hope it ties in and is not merely gratuitous (although even if it is it does develop Relick's ability so it isn't superfluous) Right, well that said I am very much looking forward to meeting the son of these theives... |
| ali43 2004-10-31 ch 1, | abuseHey, nice start ... I'm excited to see where it's going to go. I am enjoying the characters immensely, especially thier dialect. Below are some things you might wanna look at but in the main it's a good solid begining. Venna swore as Relick yanked back on the reigns again— so much if that horse had a soft mouth. |